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| | Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd | |
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Dinkleberg
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| Subject: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:19 am | |
| Laziness caused me to post this later than I would have wanted. Anyway, here it is.
The rattle of iron chain echoed throughout the soil. Dozens upon dozens of people, so called “Citizens”, were fit in these shackles. They trotted upon the graves of their fellow men, marching toward their oblivion. As they walked, a child fell, collapsed from dehydration and hunger. The flock of humans momentarily stopped. A man strolled over to the youth. She looked up to the adult, with pity and grief, hoping to find a hint of compassion in those cold hard eyes. She found none.
“So the lamb has fallen from the herd, I see.” The man said.
The juvenile said nothing. Then the first blow struck. The man had raised his whip and hit her repeatedly. Gashes and wounds opened up on the body of the poor innocence, blood blossoming from her injuries. She could then take no more, and simply …died.
“Pathetic.” He man said, spitting on the carcass. He kicked the remains of the girl with an iron boot. Then he turned to the Citizens. “Who told you to stop moving, cattle?!” he said, striking his whip in the air. The man didn’t bother to unchain the corpse, so the mob of laborers marched on, with the dead body dragging with them.
They reached their destination. On the outside, it looked like a mine. In reality, it was a low-tech modern day equivalent of a labor farm. The man with the iron boot met with another man in the shadows.
“They’re all yours now.” He said.
“Yes… They seem like a good batch.” His acquaintance replied.
Loud shouts began emanating from inside the mine.
“I’ll have to excuse myself, there seems to be a… disturbance.” The man’s acquaintance purred.
“Don’t take too long, commander.” The man said.
“Oh, I don’t go by that anymore. You can refer to me as… Oliver.” His associate said, before slithering down into the mine.
The noise was coming from a man of medium build, shouting with a pickaxe gripped tightly in his hands.
“I am not going on like this!” he yelled. “Can’t you see that this is sick and twisted, can’t you see that this is just wrong?” Oliver appeared suddenly behind him.
“The secret to humor… is surprise.” He whispered.
The man, angry and startled, swung his pickaxe at him. Oliver easily sidestepped the wild swing, and in a quick fluid motion, he put his gun against the man’s temple.
“The Gods too are fond of a joke.”
Without hesitation, he pulled the trigger. Blood splattered around him, as the man collapsed, a smoking hole in his head. Oliver adjusted his blood-spotted lasses, and climbed back up.
“Wrong indeed.” He chuckled.
The man with the iron boot noticed Oliver’s return.
“Well?” he asked.
“It is… taken care of.” Oliver replied. “Don’t you have to get back to your duties?”
“It can wait.” The man said.
“I see.” Oliver answered.
The man got up, and started to walk away. Oliver then took his pistol and shot the man in his leg. The male fell in agony as Oliver came over to his suffering body.
“W-Why?” the man asked through clenched teeth.
“Suffering becomes beautiful when anyone bears great calamities with cheerfulness, not through insensibility but through greatness of mind.” Oliver said. “I like watching people suffer. Goodbye Grumpy, I like you enough to give you a quick end.”
Oliver takes his knife out, and positions it above Grumpy’s head.
“Say hi to the devil for me.”
“P-Plea-“ Grumpy started to whimper, before the cold steel drove through his skull.
“There was never a genius without a tincture of madness. You served your purpose shepherd.”
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:22 am | |
| I like to call this the r rated version of grumpys storys good story |
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:29 am | |
| sweeettttt. Cant believe I only lasted the first chapter, I knew oliver would kill me I loved it, I could totally imagine the poor little girl, this is really great, I applaude! |
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Zoe
FusionFall Name : Zoe Bioshine Level : 36 Posts : 450 Join date : 2012-11-18 Age : 24 FF Location : Where aren't I????
| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:31 am | |
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Dragoongamer86
FusionFall Name : Zane Sunboskov Level : 36 Posts : 4292 Join date : 2012-06-11 Age : 24 FF Location : The little secluded island in Bravo Beach thinking
| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:33 am | |
| there are so many jokes i wanna make about this title, but must resist, but so many jokes, but must resist, but so many jokes, aaahhhhhhh, my head hurts |
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:39 am | |
| - Dragoongamer86 wrote:
- there are so many jokes i wanna make about this title, but must resist, but so many jokes, but must resist, but so many jokes, aaahhhhhhh, my head hurts
least say one |
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Dragoongamer86
FusionFall Name : Zane Sunboskov Level : 36 Posts : 4292 Join date : 2012-06-11 Age : 24 FF Location : The little secluded island in Bravo Beach thinking
| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:50 am | |
| aaaaaaalllright, the name really sounds like vini vidi victory from the old thumb wrestling federation shorts |
| | | Dinkleberg
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Level : 0 Posts : 206 Join date : 2012-11-13
| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:47 pm | |
| - °«©XxTrÏçK§Hø†z®»™ wrote:
- I like to call this the r rated version of grumpys storys good story
Now, why would it be r rated? |
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:50 pm | |
| - The System wrote:
- °«©XxTrÏçK§Hø†z®»™ wrote:
- I like to call this the r rated version of grumpys storys good story
Now, why would it be r rated? bloody good action and a girl gets killled.Heads up sys 49 more post and you are a offical member of critcal x right now your a newbie member |
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:50 pm | |
| - The System wrote:
- °«©XxTrÏçK§Hø†z®»™ wrote:
- I like to call this the r rated version of grumpys storys good story
Now, why would it be r rated? and how is it related to my stories that are in the future, I dont recall any mines or cowboys in the future. |
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Xtreme Razor
FusionFall Name : Hex Makodragon Level : 37 Posts : 2861 Join date : 2012-09-18 Age : 28 FF Location : Well im over at....STALKER!!!
| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:53 pm | |
| Great story! Oliver though.. But overall awesome chapter. |
| | | Dinkleberg
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Level : 0 Posts : 206 Join date : 2012-11-13
| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Mon Jan 14, 2013 12:45 am | |
| The flag for the National Extremist Aryan Centralist Party, the main villains of this piece. |
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Mon Jan 14, 2013 3:11 am | |
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Tentegen
FusionFall Name : Jazz "Mau" Taluring Level : 21 Posts : 6296 Join date : 2011-09-06 Age : 32 FF Location : Sustained Panic
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Mon Jan 27, 2014 1:07 am | |
| this was always a good one, wonder if he was just fooling around when he made it. |
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S. Angry Ray
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| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Tue Jan 28, 2014 4:35 am | |
| Ha... Theres a League on DCUO called VeniVidiVici. Seemed like a wierd league name to choose but I see now why |
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Tentegen
FusionFall Name : Jazz "Mau" Taluring Level : 21 Posts : 6296 Join date : 2011-09-06 Age : 32 FF Location : Sustained Panic
| Subject: Re: Veni, Vidi, Vici Chapter 1- Minerva and the Shepherd Tue Jan 28, 2014 3:12 pm | |
| Forgot all about this.
Thought The Engineer made a miraculous comeback. Guess it was too much to hope for eh? |
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