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PostSubject: FanFiction - The Life Of Milton Musclewarrior   Fri Jul 26, 2013 2:13 am

A/N These are my authors notes feel free to give me ideas and if you wanna give me a character idea tell me the name, age, gender, and personality of the character. Do Not Post In Comments Please Just PM Ideas. Thank You.


Chapter 1:
Hi I'm Milton Musclewarrior. Before I tell you the story I'll tell you a little about me. I'm 12 years old and I love drawing, but even though my last name may make people think im strong I'm actually very weak. Well I thought I was, but I'll leave the rest for you to figure out. Okay the story starts at my house... "Milton your gonna be late for school again!!!" "I know Mom!!!". "Okay then just go put on some clean clothes". "Okay" I put on a pair of blue jeans, some black and neon green shoes, and a t-shirt with a black background and letters that spelled out "Future KND". On my way to school I met up with my friends, Ivan Aeroknight, Ty Arrowarmour, and Rose Stealblade. (Oh did I mention I go to a school with my friends and a bunch of super heroes??? Never mind you would have found out sooner or later.) {TO BE CONTINUED HOPEFULLY TOMORROW}


Side Notes:
Ivan (The smart one) has tan skin and black hair. He wears blue shirts that have pictures of the worlds heroes a pair of dark blue jeans. Ty (The popular one) has a light skin tone and blonde hair. He wears a dark blue jacket and orange t-shirts a pair of dark blue jeans with a few pre-ripped holes. Rose (The tactical one) has a light skin tone and brown hair. She wears contacts,     t-shirts and blue jeans. (She usually carries an IPad)


A/N Hey guys how was that? It's my first time writing a fanfiction and I wanna know your feedback. Also I didn't mean to confuse anybody with that "Future KND" t-shirt. He just wears it because it's a popular shirt, but I may connect that to the main story make it have a part. 


Chapter 2:
"So Milton whats been on your mind all you've been doing is looking at the sky and ignoring us?""I'm fine Rose. It's just that last night I could have sworn I saw a real dark green star". (Milton's thinking sequence). 'Hmm could that have been some weird project Dexter's doing? I'll ask him later'. The rest of the walk to school was real silent after those last few words Rose spoke. I couldn't blame them it was real awkward after that. When we finally got to school I spotted Dexter and told my friends,"I'll be right back guys gonna go talk to Dexter". I walked over to Dexter and whispered,"Hey Dexter I have to tell you something during lunch, okay?""Sure but give me a minute im still working on my advanced weapon for the KND""Okay".(Okay from now on when you see ' instead of " it means its a thinking sequence). 'Hmm, well i guess I can wait'. I walked back over to my friends and said,"Me and Dexter were just talking about a project he called me about last night""Okay Milton hey don't we have a science test today so lets pair up""Ok Ivan""Hmm I'll pair with anyone ya'll can decide""Okay me and Ivan""I guess that leaves me with you Rose I kind of expected that they always pair""I know right". "Okay we need to get to class or we'll be late""Yeah lets go" we barely made it and our teacher said our assignment was to find a way to drop an egg without breaking it. Of course  Dexter would ace this with some big contraption so whoever was with him really wouldn't have to work. "Hey Rose lets bring some supplies to the park to test there. We have jump pads there we could get on to a branch on a tree""Sure, but when you go up there get the big sturdy branch that's hanging out".{TO BE CONTINUED HOPEFULLY TODAY}


A/N Yo guys I'm actually writing this part while listening to Powerpuff Girls Z it is my favorite thing to watch on my IPod. Okay guys can ya'll post your ideas in the comments I change my mind.


Chapter 3:
"Milton remember you have to go to the park to study hurry up she's probably waiting""Ok Mom"(Switches to Roses point of view). "Rose dear remember you need to go to the park to study""I remember Mom. I'm on the way."(Switches back to Milton's point of view). "Hey Rose I brought the supplies but I forgot the eggs""No worries I brought 2 dozen. Now lets start""Okay". When we were done it was a peanut butter jar with duct tap all around it. "Hmm that was easy except for your fall Milton""He he yeah""Well while were here I have something to tell you that you can't tell anyone""Okay"."Well two night ago I saw a really dark green star in the sky. I wondered what it could have been so thats what I talked to Dexter about""Oh that makes sense hmm I wonder too""At lunch meet me and Dexter okay?""Okay". {TO BE CONTINUED HOPEFULLY TODAY}

 


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PostSubject: Re: FanFiction - The Life Of Milton Musclewarrior   Fri Jul 26, 2013 3:18 am

TBH it all looks like a big wall of text. You can use spoilers or write the name of the person that is ttalking over writing the "switching over to" part.

Also, every story needs a climax and a reason to be, more importantly the reader needs to meet the characters or at least have some idea of who is who. A slight subtle introduction or a quick phisical description usually works. Referencing commom things to describe other more complex stuff also helps.

Another thing, the narrator should describe the place with rich details and scenery. Or you can have the main character express his personal view of the place. It gives the reader a quick glance of what the character is looking at, and sets the mood of how he feels about the place or thing. 

If the story develops in one place, a slight intro as a narrator or as the internal voice of a character  describing the place or interesting events that are about to unfold usually works.  The main thing you want to achieve is glue.  You want your reader to feel like he can't stop reading. 

I'm tired of writing and I'm on my phone.  Hope this helps.

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PostSubject: Re: FanFiction - The Life Of Milton Musclewarrior   Mon Jul 29, 2013 4:40 am

Dr.Snake wrote:
TBH it all looks like a big wall of text. You can use spoilers or write the name of the person that is ttalking over writing the "switching over to" part.

Also, every story needs a climax and a reason to be, more importantly the reader needs to meet the characters or at least have some idea of who is who. A slight subtle introduction or a quick phisical description usually works. Referencing commom things to describe other more complex stuff also helps.

Another thing, the narrator should describe the place with rich details and scenery. Or you can have the main character express his personal view of the place. It gives the reader a quick glance of what the character is looking at, and sets the mood of how he feels about the place or thing. 

If the story develops in one place, a slight intro as a narrator or as the internal voice of a character  describing the place or interesting events that are about to unfold usually works.  The main thing you want to achieve is glue.  You want your reader to feel like he can't stop reading. 

I'm tired of writing and I'm on my phone.  Hope this helps.

 Ok cool thanks for the info
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PostSubject: Re: FanFiction - The Life Of Milton Musclewarrior   Mon Jul 29, 2013 5:47 am

No problem.

Looking forward to your next read.

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