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PostSubject: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyWed Jul 25, 2012 9:53 pm

so guys since this backstory is for the most part complete, i have decided to finally write it, so feel free to tell me what you think, but this story won't be too long as i'm not too big on creativity so don't be surprised if i don't explain something enough or if this sounds weird, as this is my first time actually writing a story, and now that that's out of the way, let's begin


Zane Sunboskov was a poor orphan living on the streets of City Point before the war with Planet Fusion began, so he learned how to survive by learning how to fight with all the junk that was around the area, and with enough practice he got pretty good with swords, and when the war with Planet Fusion began, he was one of the people who joined later on in the war, when he joined he put his weapon skills to good use for close combat. Eventually he was one of the best soldiers in the war, so he decided to go after Fuse himself, it was a tough fight through the Darklands, he barely managed to survive many places, and when he finally reached Fuse's Throne, he was very weak from the long journey, but he continued on. When he reached Fuse, he was ready for anything, but he was so weak that Fuse tossed him around like a rag doll, he was eventually blown out of the area, left battered and broken for years, (now this is where 7 Legends ties in) as the years past by, the war raged on, Fuse was eventually defeated, but a new ruler rose, Slim, he found Zane's battered body lieing around Fuse's old lair, Slim remembered that when Fuse was still the ruler, he had heard about a warrior that tried to take on Fuse, but was killed by him and that his body was never found, and then, Slim got an idea, he decided to try and revive this warrior, and make him serve him. (and that's the end of chapter 1 of 2, maybe 3, i'm not sure, but look forward to chapter 2 tommorow)
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyWed Jul 25, 2012 10:10 pm

sweet backstory have you seen mine for brad? The Life of a Demon
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyWed Jul 25, 2012 10:12 pm

Undead Brad wrote:
sweet backstory have you seen mine for brad? The Life of a Demon


yeah, i've read it, it's pretty good, very creative
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyWed Jul 25, 2012 10:13 pm

POST SOMETHING ON IT!!!! i feel alone
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:03 pm

I've noticed...............you guys like to make your stories REALLY dramatic.

XLR8 and The Hom are unfortunate SACT experiments, Bradley is possessed by a monstrous Demon and Zane was an orphan who had to live on his own and now has been taken by Slim de Jackson for evul shtuff.

Are me and Oliver the only one with mild, Cartoon Network-ish, Hanna-Barbara signature backstories???
lol!
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:05 pm

yep pretty much
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:23 pm

Undelos wrote:
I've noticed...............you guys like to make your stories REALLY dramatic.

XLR8 and The Hom are unfortunate SACT experiments, Bradley is possessed by a monstrous Demon and Zane was an orphan who had to live on his own and now has been taken by Slim de Jackson for evul shtuff.

Are me and Oliver the only one with mild, Cartoon Network-ish, Hanna-Barbara signature backstories???
lol!


do not judge our creativity, our stories are awesome, i've always really been a bit of a fan for the kind of character who pulls himself up from nothing, and chapter 2 will be up in the next hour or 2, i could post it now, but meh, i don't feel like it, although chapter 2 could be a bit shorter, i kinda used up a lot of my creative genius in chapter 1
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:27 pm

Dragoongamer86 wrote:
do not judge our creativity, our stories are awesome

Never said they weren't. Wink!

I just noticed that everyone's stories tend to be rather dark.
That's all.
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:30 pm

Undelos wrote:
Dragoongamer86 wrote:
do not judge our creativity, our stories are awesome

Never said they weren't. The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) 464751818

I just noticed that everyone's stories tend to be rather dark.
That's all.


okay, and just to say, chapter 2 and maybe 3, not sure if i'll make 3, but those will be a bit darker than chapter 1, it all depends on how you choose to interprite it, not like it's up yet though
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:36 pm

Actually Rex, I think my story might be Megas XLR-ish. Ya know, kinda funny and actiony.
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:43 pm

I try to keep quite a bit of humor in my story as well. Honestly, Its nice to have some drama in a show but for me, if it's too much, it wears me out.

I think one of the hardest parts in writing this story is incorporating Cartoon Network characters in the story. Its so hard to write them into your story when all you want to do is focus on building your own.
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 7:47 pm

That's why my show would barely show any of the characters. Except the Nano versions, of course.
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyThu Jul 26, 2012 8:32 pm

here's chapter 2: The Revival



It took months of work, but Slim was eventually able to to get Zane's body back to working order. It took many robot parts and cybernetics, but Zane was still half human. A few weeks later he regained consciousness, after Zane got his barings on where he was, he asked who the man standing over him was, and where they were, after Slim explained, Zane started to attack, but Slim anticipated that, so after he got Zane's body back to life, he installed a chip in Zane's brain that would force him to obey him. (in away that i won't bother to explain except it forces obedience, and clouds his mind with fake thoughts of obeying slim being the only way) When Slim activated the chip, he was near fully obediant, but free will and memory of his old life was still somewhere in the back of his mind, but Slim did not know that. (and that would be the end of this chapter, but now i want to write to write 2 more chapters, feel free to tell me what you think of this chapter, but still like i said, there will be at least 2 more chapters, so just tell me what you think, i really want to hear your opinions on this)
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyFri Jul 27, 2012 9:41 pm

now here's Chapter 3: The Mission




After a few tests to see is Zane could be useful in taking down the 7 Legends, Slim realized that he could send him to be an undercover agent to learn the Legend's secrets right under their noses, after all, surely they couldn't resist the hero who dared to chalenge Lord Fuse and was thought to be dead, (which he was, lol) until now. But in order to avoid suspicion as to why Zane was a cyborg, he would need a disguise, so Slim gave Zane some covering clothes to hide the robotic parts on his body, but in order to conceal the cybernetic eye piece on his face, he was given a special pair of shades that would conceal the eye piece through holographic technology. So Slim sent Zane out to find the Legends, but in order to draw them to a location, Slim sent many fusion monsters to a heavily populated area, the one thing no hero can resist. By the time the 7 Legends arrived, Zane was already on the scene, fighting, and when the Legends joined in, they made quick work of the monsters. The Legends were pretty impressed with Zane, so they asked for his name, he gave it, X was the first to recognize that name, and he explained who Zane was to the rest. All the Legends (even X) were shocked that Zane was alive, so he gave a fake explanation on how he survived, (that i won't bother to explain, you come up with it) they asked him to join, he accepted, and all the while the Legends had no clue that Zane was working for Slim. (and that wraps up chapter 3 everyone, but now i am almost tempted to write 2 more chapters instead of 1 more, 1 to explain his time with the 7 legends, and the other, to explain how he lives outside of the legends and slim, and how complicated his mind has become with that chip in his brain, so tell me, should i write just 1 of those chapters, or both, and if i should only write 1, then which 1 should i write)
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyWed Aug 01, 2012 10:02 pm

well, after much careful consideration, i have decided to finaly write this chapter, but i'm still not sure if i want to write my final 2 ideas, just gimme a shout if you wanna read more, but anyway, here's Chapter 4: A Split Mind





Zane's mind went crazy after Slim activated that chip, because it split his mind into two separate parts, one that would risk his life to save Slim, and the other, that knew what was right. Although the brainwashed part was in control of the body, the free part still struggled to regain control, but to no avail, as the brainwashing chip was so powerful, that Zane's free will could not win. But due to the two halves being locked in constant combat, outside of Zane's undercover work in the 7 Legends, and doing tasks for Slim, Zane would often go to that secluded island off the coast of Bravo Beach to think and center his mind, to him, it was a place where he belonged. The brainwashed half of Zane's mind would think about how even though the 7 Legends were his enemy, he felt sort of, attached to them. (in a friendly kind of way of course) And the free half, would think about how his life had changed since those days on the streets, and also how he would be able to break free from Slim's control, he got many ideas, like if he could regain control for a short period of time, then he might be able to ask the 7 Legends for help, but he knew that that idea would probably fail, because the brainwashed half would be too strong to defeat, or even knock away for a moment, but then, he got an idea.





so there is the end of chapter 4, now i know for sure that i will write at least 1 more chapter, maybe 2 if the next 1 ends on a cliffhanger like this 1 did, although eventually i might get into something else, so if i do get into something that won't make sense or something, please tell me, so i can step away from that, but look forward to the next chapter either tommorow, or friday


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Dragoongamer86 wrote:
well, after much careful consideration, i have decided to finaly write this chapter, but i'm still not sure if i want to write my final 2 ideas, just gimme a shout if you wanna read more, but anyway, here's Chapter 5: A Split Mind



Zane's mind went crazy after Slim activated that chip, because it split his mind into two separate parts, one that would risk his life to save Slim, and the other, that knew what was right. Although the brainwashed part was in control of the body, the free part still struggled to regain control, but to no avail, as the brainwashing chip was so powerful, that Zane's free will could not win. But due to the two halves being locked in constant combat, outside of Zane's undercover work in the 7 Legends, and doing tasks for Slim, Zane would often go to that secluded island off the coast of Bravo Beach to think and center his mind, to him, it was a place where he belonged. The brainwashed half of Zane's mind would think about how even though the 7 Legends were his enemy, he felt sort of, attached to them. (in a friendly kind of way of course) And the free half, would think about how his life had changed since those days on the streets, and also how he would be able to break free from Slim's control, he got many ideas, like if he could regain control for a short period of time, then he might be able to ask the 7 Legends for help, but he knew that that idea would probably fail, because the brainwashed half would be too strong to defeat, or even knock away for a moment, but then, he got an idea.



so there is the end of chapter 5, now i know for sure that i will write at least 1 more chapter, maybe 2 if the next 1 ends on a cliffhanger like this 1 did, although eventually i might get into something else, so if i do get into something that won't make sense or something, please tell me, so i can step away from that, but look forward to the next chapter either tommorow, or friday
sweet chapter! and don't you mean chapter 4?
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I swear I need to do a PROPER story for Hom.. Not just some cheesy stuff after I found some grass...
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brad, i just noticed i'll change it now
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ok, so after many delays, here is Chapter 5: Time with the Legends


Zane had been working undercover with the 7 Legends for a few months, and they didn't suspect a thing, and even though they were his enemies, the brainwashed half of Zane's mind almost felt a little like they were his friends. While he was helping the Legends Zane was always very careful in examining how they fought in battle, and while he and the Legends were at HQ, Zane tried to gain access to they're computer system, fortunatly for the side of good, he could not access the secure files, but any information that he could get, he always gave it directly to Slim. Unfortunatly for the brainwashed half of Zane's mind, the free part still had some influence over the body, which alowed him to keep the brainwashed part from "accidentally" killing the Legends in battle. Over time the Legends were able to advance and make victories for the side of good, but if not for Zane's slight sabotage, they may have beaten Slim by then.


so that ends chapter 5 everyone, i'm still debating to write the next chapter, because i will need to make a major rewrite to the 7 legends ending in order to write it, but if i do write it, then it will have the free part of zane's mind put his plan into action, so please tell me, do you want to read that, because i am close to my decision, and now i want your input everyone, but if i write it, then it will either be split into 2 parts, and the 2nd part will be written at an unprecidented time, or i could make it into 1 fairly longer chapter, so should i write it, and if i do, how do you want to read it
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyMon Aug 06, 2012 10:19 pm

I luvz it! keep writing more chapters!
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Undead Brad wrote:
I luvz it! keep writing more chapters!


so how do you want me to go about writing the final part of the story
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Dragoongamer86 wrote:
Undead Brad wrote:
I luvz it! keep writing more chapters!


so how do you want me to go about writing the final part of the story
Anyway you want it to be!
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Undead Brad wrote:
Dragoongamer86 wrote:
Undead Brad wrote:
I luvz it! keep writing more chapters!



so how do you want me to go about writing the final part of the story
Anyway you want it to be!


you know i don't like to make decisions on whether or not to split the chapter, or write 1 long chapter, that'll probably cause more delay if i have to make the decision, because i'll have to debate with myself
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Dragoongamer86 wrote:
Undead Brad wrote:
Dragoongamer86 wrote:
Undead Brad wrote:
I luvz it! keep writing more chapters!



so how do you want me to go about writing the final part of the story
Anyway you want it to be!


you know i don't like to make decisions on whether or not to split the chapter, or write 1 long chapter, that'll probably cause more delay if i have to make the decision, because i'll have to debate with myself
Make it into two parts and use the plan and it's alright if you change 7 Legends ending nobody will be mad
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alright, and i know that nobody will be mad, i was asking if anyone wanted to read that, the only people i can think of that would be mad, are 7 legends fan-people, that will only read stuff canon to 7 legends
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyMon Aug 06, 2012 11:06 pm

What? No one will be mad lol.
7 Legends is a completely different movie.
There are hardly any recent FusionFall movie projects out there right now
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyFri Aug 10, 2012 10:51 pm

ok, after some delay, here's Chapter 6: Victory Part 1: (i know the name sounds weird, but it's the best name i could come up with)



After Slim thought he had gotten enough information on the Legends, he figured it was time to strike, and so he told Zane that tommorow, he should go to their HQ, and set it to self destruct, and the free part of Zane's mind knew that now was the time to put his plan into action. When Zane went to the island in Bravo Beach to think, that was when Zane would enact his plan, and even though it went against his code of honor, he knew it was the only way, for the free part and the brainwashed part had made a truce, that when they were there, they would not fight each other, but the free half needed to break this truce if he were to regain control of his body, so when they were there, he took control, and started for the 7 Legends HQ. When they arrived the brainwashed half "woke up" and noticed what was going on, so he tried to regain control, but the free half was able to maintain control, and when he saw Hom guarding the entrance, (a job he really hates doing) Zane barely managed to make it to him and tried to tell him the truth, and then when he finished, the body fainted, leaving Hom to bring him inside.



so that's chapter 6 people, a cliffhanger right? and this could be 3 parts to avoid the the next part being too long, but anyway, i chose very carefully between whether or not to stop it here, or keep going, but this cliffhanger was better than going a bit further, so in few days or so, but don't hold me to that, the next part of Victory shall be written, and also i actually rather than making most of this up on the fly, i pre-thought it out, so i could've wrote this a bit earlier, but forgot, so look forward to the next part soon
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptySat Aug 11, 2012 10:26 pm

because this is the day of my 1000th post, as a treat i've decided to write this early, so here's chapter 7: Victory Part 2:







After Hom brought Zane in, he explained to the other Legends what Zane told him, at first they thought it was one of his stupid jokes, but they could tell from the look in his eye that he wasn't kidding. They put Zane on an examination table and found that he really was a cyborg, and examined his body, and they found the chip, most of the 7 Legends didn't know much sciency stuff, but fortunatly Oliver did, and through thorough examination of the chip he found exactly what it was doing, so he tried to bring Zane around, but when he did the brainwashed half was still in control and tried to break free. While Zane tried to break off from the shackles Oliver attempted to give the free part control, and he was fortunatly able to succeed, after the Legends explained what was going on, Zane told them the whole truth, and Oliver asked if it was possible to remove the chip, Zane said that it was, but unfortunatly, it was nearly impossible, but with Oliver's science skills, he knew he could do it, but then Zane said that his final assignment was to set the HQ to self destruct and that afterwards, Slim would march an army down to destroy the Legends if they escaped, so then they asked when the army would arrive, and Zane said it would arrive by midday tommorow. And the Legends figured that while Oliver worked on removing the chip, the rest of them would prepare for the battle.




so that's chapter 7 everyone, the final part shall be written in the coming days, and then maybe an epilouge, not sure about the epilouge, depends on how i choose to end the story, but that's a pretty good cliffhanger eh? i was careful with that 1, so tell me how you think this ending is going so far
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wow you are doing great with the story keep it up! Very Happy Very Happy
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thanks, and be prepared for an awesome ending next chapter
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What? No one will be mad lol.
7 Legends is a completely different movie.
There are hardly any recent FusionFall movie projects out there right now
so any projects are welcome to the FusionFall community on YouTube, I'd think. Very Happy

-cough cough- The Invasion Begins
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptySat Aug 11, 2012 10:56 pm

Like dah story! Mines gonna be like at the end Hom gets taken in by Slim and then 7 leegnds takes place. Your story is sick fam!
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Like dah story! Mines gonna be like at the end Hom gets taken in by Slim and then 7 leegnds takes place. Your story is sick fam!


ok did you get that idea from my story, also, sick fam Question
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyTue Aug 21, 2012 9:42 pm

after a pretty long wait, here is the epic conclusion to my backstory, Chapter 8: Victory Part 3:







It had been a few hours and the sun was begining to set, The 7 Legends worked to place a barrier around their HQ, and scrounge up any weaponry they could find, and Oliver worked tirelessly to remove the chip from Zane's brain without killing him. As the moon began to rise, everyone knew that they would need rest for the coming battle, and so they went to bed, when morning came and Slim had gotten no word from Zane, he began to suspect that the Legends had learned of Zane's working for him somehow, so he decided to push up the time of the attack. When the Legends and Zane rose from their rest, they immedietly got back to work, after about two hours of work, everyone began to hear Slim's army approach, then they all started to panic, but quickly settled back down and began to quickly finish their preparation, Oliver was close to removing the chip, so X and the other warriors decided to do a preemptive strike to buy Oliver more time. They had a tough time fighting, and they knew they wouldn't survive without some backup, after a while, they were exhausted and tired, but they succeeded in buying Oliver time, just then, Zane and Oliver rushed out of the entrance to their HQ. Oliver hauled the warriors back inside while Zane covered him, and once they were inside the fortified headquarters, Oliver said that he succeeded in giving Zane back full contol of his body, but he needed to keep the chip inside his brain to avoid damaging it, so he modified the chip to remove the brainwashing effect. With Zane free and the Legends recovered, they fought Slim's army and eventually defeated it, then Slim began to flee, knowing full well that he was no match for all of them. The 7 Legends and Zane chased Slim all the way to Monkey Mountain, and when they reached the top of the volcano, Slim knew he was cornered, and then he tried to plee with them to allow him to live, but then X cuts him saying, "You betrayed us, and all of humanity, you made Zane your Slave, you even tried to kill us, and now you just expect us to forget about it, and let you off the hook" then Slim just says, "uh, yes" and Zane walks up to him and says, "not likely" and pushes him into the volcano shouting, "BURN BABY!" then as Slim sinks into the lava, everyone just stares down at him, and walks away.







so that's the epic conclusion to my backstory, was it not awesome, anyway, i'm thinking about writing an epilouge now, do you all want me to write that, or are you fine with how it ended, because i feel pretty good about it, so just tell me how you liked it, i put some real thought into writing this, and this was just supposed to be a simple 2 chapter backstory, but then it turned into this huge story, this may have taken a while to finish, but it was fun to do, so anyway, just tell me how you feel about this


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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyTue Aug 21, 2012 9:47 pm

... EPIC!!! DO A EPILOUGE!
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Undead Brad wrote:
... EPIC!!! DO A EPILOUGE!


ok then, because you're my #1 fan, i'll write an epilouge, most likely this weekend
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Dragoongamer86 wrote:
Undead Brad wrote:
... EPIC!!! DO A EPILOUGE!


ok then, because you're my #1 fan, i'll write an epilouge, most likely this weekend
Because I'm epic! Awesome Awesome Awesome
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PostSubject: Re: The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory)   The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) EmptyMon Sep 03, 2012 7:37 pm

well guys, sorry about the month long delay, but anyway, here's the final, final, part of this backstory, Chapter 9: Free:

I edited your story here to make it easier to read Dragoon. The Story of Zane Sunboskov (My Fusionfall Character's Backstory) 3711883763
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With Slim dead,

Zane was finally free.
But everyone he knew from his old life was gone, either from old age, or from fighting in the war.

He was sad, and angry that he alone had survived up until this point, even though the 7 Legends were his friends, his life still felt empty.
He took out his rage by killing any of the remaining fusion monsters still running around.

One day while wandering through City Point, a female hero, about 16 or 17 had seen him. She could tell that something was wrong with him so she approached him and asked if something was wrong.
Zane just kept walking, then she grabbed him by the arm and said, "Please, i want to help, so is anything wrong."

Zane turned around and said,
"It's none of your business." and kept walking.

The girl said as Zane walked away,
"Well can I least have your name."

"It's Zane Sunboskov, now leave me alone."

The girl was surprised at his last name, and ran up to him and said,

"Well my name is Alice Sunboskov."

Zane was shocked, he remembered that before his mother died, that when he was about 7 or 8 years old, she had a daughter named Alice.
Unfortunatly, the two were separated when their mother passed away, as she was only an infant at the time.
Zane then turned around to face Alice and said,
"Your...my sister."

They were both surprised, but Alice was surprised more, because just then, Zane, the guy she found was a bitter, cold hearted person, gave her a big hug, and said,
"I've been alone for so long, it's nice to finally have a living relative."

Zane was still in his battle armor at the time, so Alice did not know that he was a cyborg. Just then, a bunch of Dynamite Rats showed up so Zane turned his arm into the small arm cannon, and wasted them. Alice was very confused, and then Zane took off the battle armor, revealing that the armored legs were attached to his body, showing the circuits on his body, and revealing the hideous eye piece on his face.
Alice was a bit stunned at that.
Zane then said, "It's true, I am a cyborg."

Alice asked, "But...how?"

Zane then told her the whole story, about growing up on the streets, about fighting Fuse, about being revived and brainwashed, about everything.
After the story, Alice was surprised at the it, but she understood, and so the two traveled the world together, and for the first time since being turned into a cyborg, Zane was finally happy.

X then says, "And that is the story of Zane Sunboskov, Son."

X's son then asks, "But will Slim ever return, dad?"

X then says, "No, we won't ever have to worry about Slim again, now goodnight."

X's son says, "Goodnight dad.". and suddenly, the spirits of the original 7 Legends appear and say in unison, "But Slim will return, boy."



ahaha, was that not a fantastic ending, a bit darker than the other chapters though, and does that ending not leave room for a sequel, well i'm not gonna right that, unless another 7 legends movie is made, anyway, i enjoyed this story, how about you


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i just remembered, cue theme song because i have finally finished:


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theres no way I can read all this x__X
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theres no way I can read all this x__X


well to be fair the chapters are shorter than the chapters in other fusionfall fanfics, anyway, when you finish reading be sure to tell me what you think
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here's chapter 2: The Revival



It took months of work, but Slim was eventually able to to get Zane's body back to working order. It took many robot parts and cybernetics, but Zane was still half human. A few weeks later he regained consciousness, after Zane got his barings on where he was, he asked who the man standing over him was, and where they were, after Slim explained, Zane started to attack, but Slim anticipated that, so after he got Zane's body back to life, he installed a chip in Zane's brain that would force him to obey him. (in away that i won't bother to explain except it forces obedience, and clouds his mind with fake thoughts of obeying slim being the only way) When Slim activated the chip, he was near fully obediant, but free will and memory of his old life was still somewhere in the back of his mind, but Slim did not know that. (and that would be the end of this chapter, but now i want to write to write 2 more chapters, feel free to tell me what you think of this chapter, but still like i said, there will be at least 2 more chapters, so just tell me what you think, i really want to hear your opinions on this)


My backstory sucks.

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Dragoongamer86 wrote:
here's chapter 2: The Revival




It took months of work, but Slim was eventually able to to get Zane's body back to working order. It took many robot parts and cybernetics, but Zane was still half human. A few weeks later he regained consciousness, after Zane got his barings on where he was, he asked who the man standing over him was, and where they were, after Slim explained, Zane started to attack, but Slim anticipated that, so after he got Zane's body back to life, he installed a chip in Zane's brain that would force him to obey him. (in away that i won't bother to explain except it forces obedience, and clouds his mind with fake thoughts of obeying slim being the only way) When Slim activated the chip, he was near fully obediant, but free will and memory of his old life was still somewhere in the back of his mind, but Slim did not know that. (and that would be the end of this chapter, but now i want to write to write 2 more chapters, feel free to tell me what you think of this chapter, but still like i said, there will be at least 2 more chapters, so just tell me what you think, i really want to hear your opinions on this)


My backstory sucks.

D:


hey, don't beat yourself up, i'm sure your's is fine, just let your imagination loose, write what you want, no matter how dark or beautiful it is, just write what you feel you want to write, i actually wrote most of this story on the fly, no planning ahead, i just wrote it as the ideas came
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