Spoiler:

I'll start...

*At Xtreme HQ*

X: "Done."
Hom: "What took you so long?"  
X: "The computer was infected with a virus from Fuse's technical team."
Hom: "Wow, they're dropping to our level HAHAA! NEEEERDDSS!!"  

*Rushing in through the door*
Undelos "We have a problem, guys."
X and Hom:


Grumpy: *lying on a hospital table*

Hom: "OH MY GOD!!"
"He's one of us!"

X: "He's got a ...."

Undelos: "Blindfold, I know. Wings, check. White hair, absolutely."

Grumpy: *Gets up.*


"Why did they do this to me??"
"When I was mostly unconscious, it was like I felt the operation happening with a half decent
anesthetic! Pretty painful.
THEY'RE RUINING MY LIFE AGAIN!"  

X: "SACT? SACT did this? AGAIN!?"

Hom: "Let me sharpen me bullets....."


Oliver: "I ...I..IT WAS SUPPOSED TO HAPPEN TO ME!"
"LUCKY!"   

Grumpy: "You don't want this Oli. You don't. It's a curse, nothing more."

Oliver: "Huh"


*Ring ring, ring....*

Undelos: *Picks up phone.*
"Hello, this is Xtreme HQ, how can I help?"

Anonymous voice: "If you don't want to die, tell Grumpy The Sheep these exact words."
Undelos *Whispers away from phone*
"Maniac over the phone!"

X: *Looks at Oliver.*
Whispers: "Trace call location now."

Anonymous: "Meet me by Hero Square in one hour, no weapons, no police, no backup.
NO ONE. Or I'll kill your only cousin."

Undelos: *Slowly drops phone back.*
"You're not going to like this Grumpz."  


*1 hour later*

*A person covered in black and red clothing, with his hood up, jumps down from the Hero Square book.*


Anonymous: "Ahh Grumpy, glad you could make it. Shame because I half wanted to kill all your friends instead but
a deal's a deal."  

Grumpy: "What do you want..."
"If you think you can threaten me, think again, my friends have beaten people
a hundred times bigger and stronger than you."  

Anonymous: "Oh really? STRONGER than ME?!"
*Takes down hood.*  

Grumpy: *Le gasp.*  

Anonymous: "I am Raven's brother, Daemon."
"My sister is weak. Helping the Teen Titans! HA! Small fry.
While my father devours civilizations before dinner."  

Grumpy: "Like father like son eh?"  

Daemon: "Not exactly..."

Grumpy: "Wait, Raven has a brother called Daemon?
I call major HAX."  

Daemon: "Azarath Metrion Zinthos!"
*Creates a dark energy field around Grumpy.*
"How's that for hacks..."

"You're going to help me become unstoppable.
I will have your powers now. Thanks."  

Grumpy: "Not if I can help it."  

Xtreme HQ SWAT team: *They ambush Daemon.*

X: *Takes off black sunglasses.*


"How does this guy know about SACT and your transformation?"
Grumpy: "Maybe he's really just a SACT dude in black tights." 

Undelos: *Drops down from helicopter.*

"Black tights was so last year."

Daemon: "You fools! I SAID NO BACKUP." *Le Jumps*


X: "You think we'd listen to you if you told us to play in traffic?"

Daemon: "That would be a far safer scenario than the situation I'm going to expose you to right now..."

*Undelos disappears into the shadows.*

Oliver: "X, Undelos' gone!"

Xtreme SWAT Team member Fusion Clyde: *Suddenly disappears.*

X: "Retreat! RETREAT!
GET OUT EVERYONE! GET.... OUT!"


What happens next? You decide... 

XLR8 147 wrote:

Oliver: "Huh"

X, X, X. If I was going to say "Huh?", I would use this pic:



I've been here for nearly 2 years now. C'mon, X!

 
Anyone going to contribute to the story?
C'mon you don't have to have an English degree to contribute! 
Oli...what happens next?

XLR8 147 wrote:

Oli...what happens next?

I don't know. Anyway, you only just posted the thread, X. Give it time.

little did they know,

I was allergic to feathers

Quickly edited to see how Daemon would look like:  (I thought either to make him Raven's friend or brother.)

From Raven....


To Daemon...



Looks like a cross between Altair and Venom. 

@Grumpy, that's a start... 

Grumpy: *Turns around so he can get away from Daemon* WOAH!

*Glory is unexpectedly right behind him* HEY! Whatcha doing?

Gumps: uhh.. -rushed- Trying to get away from this guy, I'm a little busy now

Glory: WAIT! don't go yet...

Grumps: *looks down into her hand and notices glory is holding a feather* ... what is that?

Glory: *looks at her hand, her hair is completely covering herself, except for one detail... her gentil smirk*

Grumps: *begins to back away but Daemon is right behind him*

Daemon: Going somewhere?

Glory: oh grumpy, I see that now you have a change of plans...

*Dragoon approaches from nowhere in particular*
Dragoon: Hey Grumps, I heard somethin' was going on and thought I should-
*notices Daemon*
Dragoon: "Who the heck is that?"
*Daemon hisses*
Dragoon: "Clearly not friendly..."
*Whips out arm-cannon as Daemon turns away from Grumpy*
"Listen, I don't who you are, but you're goin' down!"
*Begins Ramboing Daemon as Grumpy runs away*

*In spite of the force of the shots, nothing happens*
Daemon: "Ha! Foolish mortal!"
*blows Dragoon away effortlessly*
Grumpy: "Thanks for the distraction Dragoon!"
*continues running away*
Dragoon: "Yeah, whatever."
Daemon: "Grumpy!"
*Flies after*

Glory: *watches Daemon fly off and sighs* once again I'm useless... all you fancy fighters with all your powers and such...

Dragoon: I know tell me about it... So... why are you on that guys side?

Glory: ummm, I don't know why not? Seems a little fun living a little dangerously ya know? It's different than what I usually do...

Dragoon:... wow that's stupid...

Glory: naaah... I mean besides the whole, everyone being mad at you and stuff... I think watching the world burn could be kinda cool...

Dragoon:   what? why?

Glory: Well I'm kinda a pyromaniac   but i also just like to change things up a bit, do things because I wanna make a change...

Dragoon: ... so why are you following him around?

Glory: Oh? I'm not following him around   He's actually under my control

*begins to walk away* have a nice day now ^.^
*walks away in style*

*Back at Glory's evil lair*

Grumpy: Uhh...where am I? And where are my cloths?

Glory: Burned them all, and you're in my lair.

Grumpy: *Wraps himself with his wings, sneezing* Dang it Jordan

Glory: I never gave you permission to call me by my name marcie  

Grumpy: Why are you doing this:misery: ??

Glory: You should know why, you abandoned me and all our old friends, to make your art and join league, ANNDDD  


worst of all.... you never.... drew me singing  

Grumpy: Jordan you gotta believe me, I dunno how to start that drawing the pose is just too fabulous  

*Glory whips out a marker and starts drawing on Grumpy*

My story....it's ...it's ruined.


Lol just kidding.  

But you people have lost the plot.
Literally.   
I mean Dragoon at least made it relevant.

There's a psycho half demon that has Grumpy trapped in a dark energy field,
with the Xtreme Swat team disappearing every few seconds
and suddenly
Grumpy and Glory are having long conversations about ....uh...what was it about again...??  

Oh you guys know how to write.   

Maybe Undelos will come here and post a magical post of awesomeness
to inspire you writers out there....

I know you all are MUCH better at story telling than this. (To be fair, it was a bit random...    )
I guess my story telling failed you.

Adios. *Leaves Xtreme.*

yeah, am i the only good writer here or something, STICK TO THE PLOT, now guys, i want you all to bow before me while starting back over from where i left off

Meanwhile, i'm just sitting on the floor, right?

Dragoongamer86 wrote:

yeah, am i the only good writer here or something, STICK TO THE PLOT, now guys, i want you all to bow before me while starting back over from where i left off

Oh my dear boy, you are so mistaken,

but yeah I just wanted to see why everyone started getting so random.  This whole thread is out of order 

Hey hey hey, i think i did a good job since it was my first time doing that... so at least i feel accomplished xP

Gloryangel wrote:

Hey hey hey, i think i did a good job since it was my first time doing that... so at least i feel accomplished xP

I'm telling your bf riley.

Gloryangel wrote:

Hey hey hey, i think i did a good job since it was my first time doing that... so at least i feel accomplished xP

yeah well, i guess from where you left off, at least it wasn't completely off track, and could be more meanwhile

*Sneaks back into Xtreme*

Aw don't worry people!  

Some of you seem to be good at writing your own stories
and then get random when you modify something made my someone else initially.  

I tried to make the story as visual as reasonably possible so
everyone could get the story atmosphere right and stuff.   
Less talk, more action! Or something like that...
Well I can't blame anyone, it does take time to think up of good snappy dialogue
and exciting action at the same time...either that or you're naturally gifted or
you're in the right 'state'. (I.e. the opposite of 'Writer's Block'.)
Like I even know what I'm talking about...  
And Undelos still hasn't posted.   
Well I guess she is busy with her job and other personal life stuff... 

*Walks out like a boss again*

<---DAT gif.

Suddenly Oli thinks he's first in command.  

I'll continue it I guess...
You may want to listen to "Fix You" by "Coldplay" especially past the 2:30 mark:

Spoiler:

Xtremists SWAT Team: *Sprinting across the dark, rainy streets.*


Oliver: "We have to go back for Undelos! Oh yeah and Clyde."

X: "Right now we can't risk any more disappearances. We will go back for Undelos and Clyde.
Just not right now."

Daemon: *Destroys buildings*
"I didn't think it would be this easy."
"It isn't even that fun. Yet."

*Drags car with energy field and throws it onto SWAT member Ven. (Venitos.)*

Ven: *Gains head and leg injuries and struggles to get up.*


X: "Hom Choi, get Ven to medical."

Hom: "I think this is more your street, X, you do have super speed after all.
Plus I'm tough, I may be able to block Daemon's attacks for a while."

X: "Very well."

*Carries Ven through the bridge while the Xtremist SWAT team go through the subway.*

X: "Get the helicopter out of here, it's vulnerable."
*Continues through the bridge's path.*

Daemon: *Throws lamp post at X's head.*

X: *Turns around slowly.*


Daemon: "I'm going to kill your friends in the most cruel ways I can imagine.
I'm going to enjoy every second! HAhhhhHA!"

X: "And I'll make sure you'll enjoy every second of hell or prison. Whichever comes first."


*Puts down Ven.*
*Calls for backup to retrieve Ven.*
*Rips blindfold off, emitting large areas of 'eye lights'.*

Daemon: *Streams a pool of dark energy towards XLR8.*
*For a solid 20 seconds, X's light energy struggles to push Daemon's energy.*


Daemon: "I can even absorb your petty eye lights."
X: *Spreads out wings. Leaps towards Daemon.*
*Grabs swords from his back.*

Daemon:
*Places energy field around X's neck and blasting eyes to block X's breathing and light energy.*
*Uses energy field to sway him towards tall buildings while in mid-flight.*

X: *Flies straight through several buildings.*
*Half way through, his own blades flip and hit himself in the shoulder and arm.*
*After being betrayed by his blades, buildings collapse, ripped cables immediately
cause spontaneous fires, smoke filling X's lungs....*

Xtremist SWAT Team: *They reach a safe base.*
Grumpy: "I'm fine, but X, Ven, Clyde and Undelos aren't here. We need to find them."


Hom: "You need to learn to control your powers first."
"Otherwise you could pose a danger to yourself and others around you."

Grumpy: "That's the idea."

Hom: *Pauses for a couple of seconds.*
"I like it. Sounds like a plan. Let's go."

*Runs and finds X in rubble on the surface.*

Hom: "Oli, X doesn't look good. REALLY doesn't look good."
Oli: "Ok, get him to a hospital and avoid Daemon until X is out of the zone."

*X is rushed to a nearby hospital with blood dripping from his forehead and an oxygen mask
helping to maintain his breathing. Several doctors and Xtremists surround him.*


Main doctor:


"Several bruises and deep tissue scratches, second degree burns, weakened diaphragm, cerebral hemorrhage, fractured shoulder blade, blood hemoglobin oxygen binding efficiency dropped by 30%, carbon monoxide poisoning, internal impalement, large shock wave body trauma, spinal trauma, bicep muscle tissue rips, dislocated ankle, thigh trauma,
one ear is bleeding and one wrist has been sprained."

"At least he's got a full set of teeth though."

Oliver: "How long will it take for recovery?"

Doctor: "At best, 3 months."  
Oliver: "He's got an accelerated healing factor. So maybe not quite so long?"

Doctor: "Well, unless he's Wolverine, he won't be out for some time. Sorry."
*Closes door on Oli.*  

Oliver: "Ok team, I'll have to be first in command until he's better."

Grumpy: *Over communicator*
"Me and Hom are going to take this guy down. Don't you worry guys."  

Oliver: *Unconvinced.*  
"That's it, I'm calling the Teen Titans."

Robin from Teen Titans: "Hello, this IS NOT the Bat cave and I'm not liable to give you his number either...."

Oliver: "No no, I'm not looking for the caped crusader. I need the Teen Titans!"

Robin: What's the problem?


Oliver: "Daemon. Raven's brother."

Robin: "Raven, your brother... he needs to be stopped. He's near Hero Square."


Raven: "I've tried before."
"He's harder to defeat than even my father."


Robin: "Listen to me Raven, he can't be stronger than Slade."

Raven: "You have no idea."

Beast Boy: "I say we at least try. C'mon!"


*CRASH!*

Daemon: *Smashes through a Teen Titans Tower window.*
"Shamefully predictable."


Raven: "Let's take this outside, Daemon."


Daemon: "Last time, I broke your bones."
"This time I won't be so gentle."

Raven: "This is wrong, Daemon. Power corrupts people."
"Just go back to dad. Clearly you're worse than him. Leave this city."

Daemon: "You're wrong. Power is what makes the world turn.
I'm going to turn it into a new age. Stage one, kill the Teen Titans.
Bring it on. I dare you. And don't compare him to me.
He's nothing to me now."

Raven: "So be it."


*Battle between the Teen Titans and Daemon begins.*


Oliver: "Xtremists, to Titan Tower, NOW!"
*Minutes later.*

"Hom and Grumpy, do what you do best.
Everyone else, concentrate your fire on one area, maybe we can penetrate Daemon's energy field."

Hom: "Uh...I'm no scientist but that sounds unlikely....really unlikely...I mean...we're using metal bullets..."

Oliver: "Switch to energy pulse mode."  

X: *In hospital with bandages and an oxygen mask.*
*Gun shot sounds.*
Doctor: "Hospital breach! Initiate lock down."


SACT Leader: "We're taking this specimen. He is our property."

Doctor:


"Uh, I don't know who you think you are, but we are trained semi-military professionals here
and we're not intimidated by you gunmen. Leave or we will involve law enforcement methods."
"Don't make me use this..."



SACT Leader: *Shoots the doctor with a tazer.*
"XLR8 is up on level 7. Kill him on sight, while he's weak. This is our best opportunity."

Doctor:
*Gets stunned and falls to the floor.* 


Nurse: *Stays down, waits for SACT to leave...*

SACT: *Go inside the lift.*

Nurse: *Calls the Xtremists.*

SACT Member: "Comes back to shoot the nurse."

Meanwhile....

Daemon: *Crushes Raven with several vehicles and energy fields.*
Raven: *Falls to the ground.*
Robin: "Raven!"
Raven: "He's....t...too...s..s.strong. Sstronger than ever..."


Oliver: "Hom, you're first in command, take care."
Hom: "Where are you going!?"
Oliver: *No answer, quick dash...*

*At the hospital*
X: *Eyes slowly open.*

Oliver:
*Drives then runs to the hospital.*
"Let me through, I'm an Xtremist, first in command."




Oliver: "Aww man, I bet I'm too late."



*Spots one SACT member walking in the corridor.*
*Pushes hospital tray to accelerate towards him, knocking him unconscious onto a wall.*



*Goes to level 7, to the room X is in.*
*Enters room.*

*Wrong room.*
Oliver: "What the..."
Doctor: "I got stunned. I deserve compensation! Now shut up while I play Kingdom Hearts."

Oliver: "Uh...sorry..."

*Finds the 'right room'.*
*Sees a dozen SACT members on the floor.*
"Who's here!?"


X: "Just you Oli."
Oliver: "X! Has it been 3 months already??"
X: "Wah...."
Oliver: "Nevermind."

X: "Nice job taking down that SACT guy."
Oliver: "Looks at the dozen on the floor...."
"Very funny X."
X: "Anyway, I spoke to Tony Stark just after I took them down."
Oliver: "COOL! DAT guy makes my inventions look like college projects!"
X: "Now let's uh...get to the battlefield. Quickly."


X: *Arrives near Daemon.*
"I have powerful friends, Daemon. See you've met the Teen Titans.
I asked Tony Stark to supply me with one of his suits with energy field generation capabilities."
"Tony couldn't make it. He's at an awards ceremony.  "

Hom: "X! You're supposed to be like...almost dead, dude."
X: "Still healing. The suit should take care of me until I take care of Daemon."  
*Puts on a portable suit.*


Daemon: "You can do energy fields too now?
That's cute. But seriously, you're annoying me now.
Why won't you just DIE already!!?"
*Demonic voice. Fades into inaudible sounds.*

X: "Because scum like you are still free to torment the innocent."
*Generates energy field to counter Daemon's.*
*Fires EMPs.*
*Generates counter magnetic fields.*
*Presses a button he knows not of what it does....*
"I can also use my eye light energy through the visor..."  


"NOW! Everyone hit him with everything you've got."

*Energy pulses, angelic eye lights, energy fields and other artillery fly across the air towards Daemon.*

Cyborg: "BOOOOYYAA!"


Grumpy: "Ah I take it back, I love these powers!"   

Oliver: *Notices ripped cables lying on the ground.*
*Climbs on top of a building near Daemon.*
*Runs and jumps onto Daemon, electrocuting him with long short circuited cables.*

Daemon: *His power is fading. He cannot handle all the dangerous stimuli at once without
a working energy field to protect him.*
*He falls to the ground with Oliver on his back.*

Daemon: *Quickly gets up and runs towards X.*
*Dents the Iron Man suit with a few repetitive punches.*

X: *Quickly punches Daemon in the face and back.*
Daemon: *Picks X up and throws him onto a bus, wrestling style...*

Hom: *Performs a Sparta/Sherlock Holmes styled kick to Daemon who falls onto the ground
and is wacked by Hom with a post box.*



*Places his foot on Daemon's jaw.*
"Tell me where Undelos, Ven, Clyde and Grumpy's cousin are."

Daemon: "I WANT GRUMPY'S POWERS......."
Hom: *Points a pistol towards him.*


"Answer the dang question YO."

Daemon: *Cough cough*
"They're all under some cars a couple of streets away."
"As for Grumpy's cousin."

"I AM Grumpy's only cousin."    

Dragoon:  

Hom Choi: "WHAT THE..."


Grumpy: "Part demon, part angel....."  
"I can dig that."   

Xtremists:     

So X is played by Tony Stark and Bruce Wayne, the former Teen Titans play themselves, I play myself, the doctor plays himself and Hom is played by Samuel L. Jackson.

so i got to make a face...that's all i get...JUST A FACE  

Dragoongamer86 wrote:

so i got to make a face...that's all i get...JUST A FACE  

I make this stuff up as I go lol.
I generally look at who's online at the time and slide in members' characters.
I guess I could have given you a bigger role.
Although most of the Xtremists are part of the SWAT division anyway.

Plus, anyone can continue the story....
*No one continues the story.*
Ya lazy bunch...
Lol just kidding. 

And I thought it was time Oli became a bigger action hero since this
is the darker Xtremists story arc.

And Oliver is always away from the action. (Him being the main scientist character and all.)
Now he electrocutes a half demon and tries to rescue X with a shotgun in a hospital.   
Oliver isn't impressed....I can tell...
Maybe I should've given Oliver an RPG or Bazooka or something.... 

Maybe if I ever finish my 7 Legends comic, I'll turn this into one too. 

What is this ?

Marcelo Arias wrote:

Gloryangel wrote:

Hey hey hey, i think i did a good job since it was my first time doing that... so at least i feel accomplished xP

I'm telling your bf riley.

lol he's not my bf xD hahaha... but his sister now started calling me her sister in law ... haha weeeiiiirrrd

Hay guise what's goin' on up in dis thre................

*sees the ammount of times I was SUPPOSED to haveshown up to carry the story*


....oh.
Ooops. Sorry.



Eye lights mate?
We initially said that as a joke. Here. I'll do you a favor: How about "Opitcal High Energy Blast" or Optic Blast for short.

Wellz.I shall make sure to contribute to this tommorow sinc I DID in fact have a larger message here.....................but my stupid phone lost all of the 20-minute message and it took all of my self controll not to punch it in the face.

I'll give my classic awesomeness tomorrow.

xXx๓ēi คkirคxXx wrote:

What is this ?

Sparta... 
I don't know what we call 'this' kinda thing.
Apparently it's like role playing but significantly different.
Don't know what to call it.
It's like a fan fiction with images and in a specific colon: *asterisk* format. 
Also, characters used in images do not necessarily need to be consistent, as long as it matches
the above description. (E.g. Hom: *Kicks Daemon* [Insert kick gif here for example.])

But yeah, it's just a story I was making up as I go along.
Everyone's welcome to add to the story.

Undelos wrote:

...My stupid phone lost all of the 20-minute message and it took all of my self control not to punch it in the face.

Doing this kinda stuff on a phone...even on desktop mode.... 
Is painful.
Particularly when adding images.
You were adding images right  ...otherwise this is just a random fanction...*shudders*. 
I consider the visual aspect very important as it conveys the story much more efficiently
and with less effort.
And eye lights... 
Give me a break!   I haven't done this stuff in ages!
Optic blasts do sound better.    *Too lazy to edit posts.*
Looking forward to your contribution to the story tomorrow.

Note to everyone: you can even contribute an alternative scene, dialogue,
additional scenes, "meanwhile" scenes, "What If mode scenes" like in Spider-Man comics where
a previous story is retold with a change in the plot, e.g. a character NOT dying this time,
someone never graduating when they did in the original story, etc.
(To see how it impacts the story.) It's quite interesting.

should i write on this thread maybe my good storyness will rub off on you guys

Ace the Legend wrote:

should i write on this thread maybe my good storyness will rub off on you guys

No need to ask.
Anyone's welcome to contribute in any way they want. 
(E.g. alternative scenes, continuing the story, plot twists, etc. Whatever you want.  )
This isn't just my story.

for anyone of those pics I would imagine hom choi with a joint in his mouth idk y lol it just fits him, id think he'd agree Lol

Message to viewer: Xtreme FusionFall does NOT support/glamourise
the inappropriate use of drugs/alcohol/smoking.

Zeroknight wrote:

for anyone of those pics I would imagine hom choi with a joint in his mouth idk y lol it just fits him, id think he'd agree Lol

Huh? 
Is that a typo or... 
A joint in his mouth? WAAH?

Drug related referance lol. A joint is a blunt.And a blunt is used to smoke pot

Message to viewer: Xtreme FusionFall does NOT support/glamourise the inappropriate use of drugs/alcohol/smoking.  

We gonna allow that, X? I mean, it is an explanation.

As soon as X sees it you can censor everything out or delete it

Mod Message: don't wait for me lol. (XLR8)
Because I can't moderate the forum like I used to.
I'm studying more often now.
Hope the other mods and admins are dependable.  
And you members do your bit too.  
I'll fix your post this time; hopefully you'll now know
how to make it ok yourself. (A clear notice saying you do NOT support/glamourise the inappropriate use of drugs/alcohol.  
You know...in case you make another reference lol.
Also applies to cigarette smoking.

Hey! Can't a retired admin get some sleep around here!?
 Kidding...just proving a point. :p 
Oli, haven't I trained you enough?  
Drug/alcohol references must either be avoided, really not noticeable
or there must be a clear notice to the viewer that Xtreme/or the specific member, does NOT support/glamourise the use of inappropriate drug/alcohol usage.
*Lazily watches from the shadows...*
Alright...I'll fix it this time...

Sorry about that

Remember kids don't stay in school,get into a white van for candy and always love father

°«©РwŃź0Ŕ®»™ wrote:

Sorry about that

Remember kids don't stay in school,get into a white van for candy and always love father

I never get tired of that.  

o you

Undelos...that post you were going to make...
Disappoint.  
Also, near Halloween, maybe someone else can start something like this but in a Halloween style/theme. Involving Grim, Billy and Mandy?  

But.....I just paid to have my internet cut back on just two days ago...


I DO want to do it......however, I don't know if Rex's power will be received well in the story. Yes, Rex DOES have powers. Problem is, they make more sense in my fiction versus being thrown into some random story.


I guess what I'm trying to say is that I don't want someone thinking" geez. Another player with superpowers. How original. Pffft. They don't even make sense. How is he even able to do that??"

But then again, I'm told I overthink things. Maybe it will be fine.
I'll give it a shot. Later.
Check timestamp of post. G' night.

HEY! How come Undelos never used her powers when we really needed them
in the battle of Bella.  
LOOL! "Battle Of Bella." 
 

Well you're great at this sort of thing (and story telling in general)
so whatever works for you.
Sometimes story arcs shouldn't always be in canon with others for creative freedom's sake.
It's up to you. You don't have to contribute lol but it would be cool.

It's up to you if you want Undelos to reveal her powers for this particular story,
take away the power aspect, give the power aspect a different angle or whatever.
Maybe wonder how it would affect the story. (Even small changes can make huge differences.)
Everything's just for fun. It's not like any of these stories will one day become
T.V. shows.... (And even, they can be modified.)

Undelos, you really think anyone would be upset if you messed up the story in any way?
We had random conversations let alone your (usually) sensible story telling.
No one got upset.  :trollface:I was kidding around. 

Maybe my story telling was bad....I mean this stuff looks better in my mind anyway.

Didn't think you'd think that deeply into it.
You've made a family!
I haven't bothered giving my other characters (IRON 147, Blade Xtremestone, etc.)
a back story or anything.

Since the name is IRON 147, the only reasonable explanation could be that
he's from a parallel universe or he's X's brother or cousin or something.

Anyway, looking forward to your upcoming post. *Waits a thousand years...*
Just, you know...try to stick to the colon: *asterisk* format with images here and there.
(I tried to add images to most parts but obviously, I can't add images for every single little
shot.)

Also had some more ideas for X:

- X is a police chief or something for most of his story arcs. Probably. (Except probably the Xtremists story arc timeline.)
- After he leaves the Xtremists, (after all aliens threats have been eliminated, only human criminals remain) he starts his scientist career.  

- One day (far into the future when he has a wife and a kid) he comes back for a mission that involves that demonic figure I spoke about some months ago,
the figure that could command people what to do, even telling them not to breath would
force them to stop breathing.  

- His son gets killed and X goes rogue. (Well...he goes all Deadpool on the killer...)
I guess someone close to him stopped him from fatally wounding the killer.

So many stories, so little time.

String Theory? (Technically hypothesis since there isn't enough evidence and it's really theoretical and difficult to
examine.)
Your character can manipulate the oscillation frequency of particles??
Or maybe your character can shrink themselves to subatomic levels?
How you ended up incorporated String Theory into your FusionFall character is anyone's guess lol.

As for X...he's not Clark Kent lol.
Would you have preferred it if he was bitten by a radioactive unicorn?
And in my vision of the character, I don't like the idea of him being an alien,
you can't relate to an alien as well as you can to a human. (Plus there would be way too many space themes and settings.
It's sometimes nice to ground most battles on Earth at least in this case. I know FusionFall is a sci fi game but
it's not like Doctor Who, Star Wars, Star Trek, etc.)
Plus it opens up to the possibility of other SACT experiments.

I mean, I guess he could have been a volunteer instead of being forced but...
it needs to be dark to an extent.
It's not that dark.   Is it?

XLR8 147 wrote:

it needs to be dark to an extent.
It's not that dark.  Is it?

Well....

I guess....TECHNICALLY...its not.

A deep story is the kind of story characterized by a character going through alot of personal development due to the usually arduous circumstances that comes with that type of story. It can be psychological tiring, testing the very character. Sometimes, the deep story can be a journey of the character to discover themselves.


A dark story contains elements in it that may be controversial, includes alot of death or tortuous related themes. It may also include loss of life, Overwhelming circumstances that may test the main character to the very brink of his/her sanity, and may also end up with no reward in the very end.


So I guess, Your story is a mix of both.

XLR8 147 wrote:

Your character can manipulate the oscillation frequency of particles??

 . . . . .


One of them can.

XLR8 147 wrote:

How you ended up incorporated String Theory into your FusionFall character is anyone's guess lol.
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Actually, it came from The Avengers: Earth's Mightiest heroes.

It was the episode where Thor, Hulk, Tony, Wasp and Ant Man had to try to take down Graviton.
After Hulk started showing that he was a match for Graviton no mater what he threw at him, He exclaimed that he is one of the four fundamental forces of the Universe.

I wondered what that meant because it sounded like it meant business.

So I did a google search on it.

Come to find out, the four fundamental forces are Gravity (ironically the weakest. who knew?), Electromagnetism (includes light), Weaker nuclear Force, and the Stronger nuclear force.
Im a little lost as far as what the other two are, which I have to do more reading but when I got to this page I found a link to String Theroy and when I read about it, It made sense for my story.

XLR8 147 wrote:

As for X...he's not Clark Kent lol.
Would you have preferred it if he was bitten by a radioactive unicorn?
And in my vision of the character, I don't like the idea of him being an alien,
you can't relate to an alien as well as you can to a human. (Plus there would be way too many space themes and settings.
It's sometimes nice to ground most battles on Earth at least in this case. I know FusionFall is a sci fi game but
it's not like Doctor Who, Star Wars, Star Trek, etc.)
Plus it opens up to the possibility of other SACT experiments.

I mean, I guess he could have been a volunteer instead of being forced but...

Smells liek Wolverine broham..... 

Not sure in what aspect you mean by space themes (i.e: starship troopers....Alien...?) but It doesnt get THAT kind of spacey.

Granted, it does open up room for other worlds to be introduced, some time introducing the different areas in the galaxy; realm of matter and beyond....but it never gets......um.....spacey??? 

Most scenes do take place on earth, but it does branch out to other areas.  



As far as the whole alien thing goes, It would depend on how you write the character. He already has human attributes that pretty much anyone can relate to. Other than the hidden physical differences aside from the wings, he's not different at all from a human.



+ He could have girl troubles just like anyone else.

+ He could STILL get beat up, reguardless of his increased endurance and strength.

+ As far as Max strength, 2 tons/1814 kg. In flight only 600 lbs/ 272kg.
so its not like he's completely OP. Spiderman's max strength is 10 tons.

+ He has friends, Has people he hates, others.......he avoids.(fill in ze blanks...) cant stand the Doctor, has particular foods he likes and so on.

It depends on how you write the character. If you dont create a way for the audience to get to know the character, how can anyone relate to them?

Hypothetically creating a generic situation for an example:

Say for instance throughout the entire comic, X is described as loyal and always preferring to be in the company of his friends. However he has been on a long time search for his mother who taught him everything he knew. She suddenly disappeared on earth when they both arrived.

Journeying with his friends while following the shreds of evidence that carry them on a trail to her, they encounter a dark spirit that periodically taunts them at every turn. Keeping face so that they dont lose hope, they smile whenever they can, enjoying the little things as they go along their trying and seemingly impossible journey. However the spirit is relentless, even going so far as putting the sight of his mother right in front of him, just before it snatches her away.

Hurting deep inside and not sure if he can take the agony of trying to find hope again, His friends rally around him and convince him to get up and keep going. So, after given some time, he does. At that point, X notices something that he shares with his comerades.

When the spirit appears again not too long after they resume their journey, X and his friends are ready. After a grueling fight where one of his team members is seriously injured and the spirit falls to the ground as well as what seems to be the body of his mother, X has to make a decision to either go check on his friend, see to his mother, or exact his final revenge. Because you have already been introduced to the character, you know he would choose to see to his friend first. His friend is seriously hurt but tells him to check on his mother. Leaving him in the care of his friends, he goes to his mother.

Reaching out to touch her, he finds that she is ice cold. Calling out her name desperately, he shakes her. No response. noticing later that her skin is in bad condition, he turns to the spirit that is rising off the ground. Laughing manically at X's twisted expression, the spirit goes to admit that it is the spirit of his loving mother. It ripped out her spirit years ago after they arrived and have been using her life force to cause mayhem and misery. However the last bit of her spirit that was left wished to see her son again. However she never wanted it to become true. So he granted her the pleasure anyway- in its own twisted sort of way. And now that his mother's life energy is now almost spent - its time for a replacement.



What do you think X should do in this situation?


Its not a detailed story, it was in fact supposed to be quick.

This is how you craft a story around any kind of character. Open up the character, tell the likes and dislikes, describe his emotions during important parts like happiness, depression, sadness, anger among other times. What are his morals? What are his petpeeves? How does he feel about his current journey?


This is what creates the connection between reader and character.

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Another thing........You DO know that if any secret fictional CN group DOES do anything like that, it probably wouldn't be SACT?  I'd bank on the G3 doing something like that. They're the misguided Galactic Guardian Group that were responsible for kidnapping Lance and Launa in Symbiotic Titan.

They're already known for doing shady and misguided things in the sake of protecting the earth......even if that means stopping well intentioned people and groups alike.


Spent two days trying to make this post.
Made the story in 5 min though...

2 days?!  And that story was pretty dark, darker than mine.

Also, the boy finding out what happened to his mother has been done too many times I think.

In my version (which I haven't finalised or even described much of)
X's spontaenity causes him to have an unusual behaviour;
He's a lone wolf but given the right situation, he happily hangs with friends but not always. Sounds strange but he's laid back when leading/with his friends but reserved when he's virtually alone/few people.
His subconscious is troubling and usually he can't tell why.
I find the best way to make the audience like a character could be making
him/her vulnerable/felt sorry for, relatable attributes or simply a uniquely good heart.

As for girl problems, X probably wouldn't be in a relationship until maybe his early 20s. He's just like that. His suffering's shown when he painfully grows his bloody wings in a motorway in the early, dark hours of the morning.
And in high school before his transformation, he's someone who stands up for the weak (against bullies I guess) when he's fairly weak to begin with but not proper skinny weak. His intelligence back then was above average but not genius level which he reaches some time after becoming a SACT experiment.
I try not to involve family (at least not yet) to avoid losing focus of a deep and misunderstood character.

2 days, Undelos??
*Shudders to think what Undelos would write for science coursework. 
And SACT just seemed like the perfect FF group to corrupt.  

Just add SWAGRID in and you guys will get an oscar 


make him do a barrel roll! trollololo............
OMG WHY DIDN'T YOU GUYS ADD YOUR FAVE NEIGHBORHOOD SYMBIOTE GENERAL!???

My talent is wasted here....jk lol 
VENOM needs to be In this !!
Like Hom choi and venom and Grumpy all do something to help I don't know.
Take notes.....venom IS A MOTORCYCLE KIND OF GUY.